One day, there was a kid that live in a small town.His parents and his friends usually called him Herry. He was very diligent boy. Everyday before he went to school he usually clean his own room first, helped his mother and went to school by a bus after that. He is on 5th grade in elementary school. His friend in elementary school also know him as a smart kid. Every task and exercise that he made always get perfect score. Even his teacher amazed with his ability, because there is no one can as smart as him.
Because of his intelegency, he became the head of the class and his teacher always ask him to do something in any activity, such as, Smart Student Competition, Poem Read competition, The Leader of Flag Ceremony, and many other things that his teacher ask him to do. That make him very easy to get a rank in the class.
In a one morning, he went to his school by a bus like usually he did. When he was studying in his class, his teacher ask him to do something. “Herry, would you like to be the leader of the flag ceremony in next two days? There is no one suitable for that position except you”. “Oh, it is my pleasure Sir, become the leader of flag ceremony. I will show all of my ability Sir”. “Oh, that’s good” said the teacher. Herry went home with happy feeling. He is so glad by himself after that duty.
The next day, Herry woke up early in the morning and clean his bedroom. That make his mom early too and came to his room.
“Why you wake up very early this morning? This is Sunday. You don’t have to go to school today, right?”
“It’s a right mom, but I have to make a rehearsal for flag ceremony tomorrow.”
“I do know that, but you don’t have to do this, do you?”
“Talk less do more, mom. I don’t want to wasted the time.”
“Oh that’s good. That’s my boy.”
After cleaning his room, he went to his school by bus alone. After arrived to school, he did rehearsal alone. He memorizing the step by step that day. Until he felt comfort with his reaction, he went home. Because of feel nervous, he continued to practice become leader of flag ceremony.
The next day, in the morning he prepared himself before went to school. A long the way to the school, he was remembering the step in flag ceremony. After go down from the bus he felt there was something strange with him. He looked around and saw a big man watch for him. He felt afraid and tried to runaway from that man. But when he looked behind, he saw that man still behind him and look after him. So that he increase his speed and ran so fast. Finally he arrived to school. He looked once again to outside the school and saw that man can’t go insider the school.
He looks happy because of that, but when he opened his bag, what he was feeling changed.
“Where is my hat? Where is my hat?” he asked his friend for that but his friends also didn’t know that. He have one’s back to the wall because he had to be the leader of flag ceremony that day. He suddenly became lost of confidence. Nyoman, saw what his friend’s problem and came to Herry.
“Hi, Herry. Why don’t you come back to your house and take your hat?”
“What? My house is far from here. It takes 5 minutes by bus and the flag ceremony run in 10 minutes. It will be bad if I don’t do the rehearsal first. That’s bee in one’s bonnet.”
“Yeah, you’re right.”
The time flies and flag ceremony must go on. When Herry was panic, there was a security came to him and ask Herry. “Is this your cap? Because there is your name in this cap.”
“Oh thank’s God. Where did you get it?”
“There is a big man gave this to me. He tried to give you this, but he said you ran so fast. So he can’t.”
Herry realized he made misunderstanding to that man. Finaly the flag ceremony go on the track and success.

welldone wahyu. You took the moral value very deep inside the story. But it will be better if you bring more climax problem there. But your story is very simple, I like it!
BalasHapusgreat story. simple but meaningful.
BalasHapusi have read the story like this before but different from yours.
your grammar and vocabulary have to increased by yourself like the other did in their story. i think it ill be better if you fulfill more adverb and idioms to complete the vocabulary task.
like fitri,,your story is simple but have a deep meanings....i like to read it,,,
BalasHapusgreat,yu! your story full of moral value. one of them is we have to not suspicious to the other mistakenly..your story also simple and easy to understand..nice :)
BalasHapusnice story....it is simple but have a good moral value...I like it.
BalasHapusbut, I found some sentences in present tense, which I think you should change it into pas tense...
good job!
i like your story, because it is simple but has good moral value...
BalasHapusdon't judge a book by its cover.. it is simple but easy to get the moral value....
BalasHapus) I agree with Ayu, there are some sentences in present tense and that make confused. Because in the first sentence, you use the past tense’s form to introduce the characters. It means that Herry doesn’t life now. I think you want to tell the story in the past. Am I right? But, overall your story is really nice. It’s simple but has the great moral value. We must keep our positive thinking!Good job, Brother!
BalasHapusit would be a very clear and interesting story if you revise it a bit....especially when the characters were having a chat, it's better if you add the speaker's name after or before the words the said....make it better.....but as long as so far it is a great story....
BalasHapusgreat story....it is simple but have a good moral value...I like it.good job brotha...
BalasHapusGOOD story,, ,so nice from so good...........
BalasHapusGood job Wahyu! Your story is very meaningful!! Like it
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